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The Creed of Apollo. by ~Exangeline:iconExangeline:



This hall is infinite,
Lined with metal doors;
Enclosed enclosure,
For those with flaws.

The ugly stay within,
The pretty rule the world;
Exposed exposure,
And in the corners they curled.

Upon the drastic contrast,
Apollo walks the walking way;
Approaching approacher,
Into the place with no day.

There is no strife here,
No disquiet that he might see;
Resolute resolution,
The decision to set them free.

Entitled to a certain god,
No humanitarian to be true;
Assasinated assassin,
Walks the way with you.

Approaches a door unlocked,
Stops in the threshold to observe,
Observant observer,
To a sight that is truely absurd.

The room is white stained red,
A girl lay flat with no eyes to see;
Saving saviour,
Holds her to his chest with intensity.

Alarm bells ring loud,
Pulling the fire escape in reflex;
Signalling signal,
Doors open across the complex.

Apollo approaches the doorway,
In haste undoes the clasp;
Escaping escapee,
Running 'till she awakens in his grasp.
©2008 ~Exangeline
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If my shame spills
Its worth across this floor;
Goodnight, tonight,
I'm burning star IV.


- Coheed & Cambria, Apollo I: The Writing Writer
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=AlexDewain:iconAlexDewain: Apr 12, 2008, 12:24:50 PM
Will I ever write like you? :)

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~Blessed-Silence:iconBlessed-Silence: Apr 13, 2008, 10:40:41 PM
HOW did I know this was a Coheed and Cambria inspired piece before I even reached the user comments?

Because your obssessed girl. OBSSESSED.

But it's ok, you're kooky like that and that is why for I likes you.

I really like your poem too. It flows really well and I especially like your use of...well I don't know what to call it but the third line in every stanza, e.g. observant observer. You know what I'm talking bout CancerBear.

xx
~Exangeline:iconExangeline: Apr 14, 2008, 12:11:37 AM
Thanks Kiz... <3

And yes, I am, borderline-complete-kookie, obsessed with Coheed & Cambria.

Of course, everything in the poem is mine. Buaha.

It was actually going to be my art major back when I was doing a comment.

But again, thanks. I love reading your comments.

:heart:

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EXANGELINE.
photomanipulation | poetry | prose | anime

Rodney McKay: I'm picking up a strange reading from right over there.
John Sheppard: Define strange.
Rodney McKay: [pause] You don't know what strange means?
~Exangeline:iconExangeline: Apr 14, 2008, 12:12:13 AM
:] You far surpass me, love. But thanks for the lovely comment.

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EXANGELINE.
photomanipulation | poetry | prose | anime

Rodney McKay: I'm picking up a strange reading from right over there.
John Sheppard: Define strange.
Rodney McKay: [pause] You don't know what strange means?
~Blessed-Silence:iconBlessed-Silence: Apr 14, 2008, 1:32:41 AM
It's because my comments are saturated in awesomeness.

And AIDS. Always with the AIDS.

Kookie is good. And again it's why the world loveth you.

Mashidoodle says HI Hi Hi HI I say HI.
~Exangeline:iconExangeline: Apr 14, 2008, 1:46:19 AM
I'm ashamed at you, Keira.

YOU FORGOT CANCER.

But otherwise, your comments are sufficiently saturated.

:heart:

(I say hi to Mashidoodle with an exaggerated amout of I's.)

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EXANGELINE.
photomanipulation | poetry | prose | anime

Rodney McKay: I'm picking up a strange reading from right over there.
John Sheppard: Define strange.
Rodney McKay: [pause] You don't know what strange means?